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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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Nowadays, no matter in urban or suburb the whole world,
traffic
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 jam has become a serious problem and cause massive attention. In my view, there is too much population currently and cause high
deservation
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reservation
 of
car
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 use, and the government should promote well-equipped public transport to solve these issues. Nowadays, the population is sharply growing, promoting the
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reservation
 of private
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 use and the need for public transportation.
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,
traffic
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 jams and
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 crashes frequently happen both in the city and town, enhancing severe
traffic
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 conditions.
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, the
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 condition is terrible during the rush hour in the morning and evening, too many people driving their cars to work and back home at the same time and crowded the road quickly. It is commonly believed that too much driving may cause air pollution.
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, it is more convenient for workers to drive a private
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 of taxing public buses.
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, the government should take
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 to encourage people to take the subway and save energy. In order to solve
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 problem, it is necessary to promote fundamental public transportation,
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 as the subway and bus.
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, it is necessary to increase the shift of the subway and bus, which office workers mostly use.
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, the government should issue some kinds of action.
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, the prices will decline by 50% during the rush hour by bus or underground, set more common-share bicycles for free and encourage people to go to work
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 of taking a taxi.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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