You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you

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Dear Ahmed, Hope you're fine. I'm writing

this

letter to inform you about the latest news that the

Amazone

services are available now in Pakistan. Our government and Ecommerce department had been trying to convince

Amazone

upper management for 5 years to allow us legally. Unfortunately, due to some cyber security issues, they blocked our country to serve in E-commerce. But the good news is that after the hard

work

of the IT ministry, they

are agree

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to write a business agreement with our country. Nowadays, everybody wants to

work

online and earns money as a virtual services provider.

Therefore

, people are keen to participate in online investing and earning through the

Amazone

. It is

also

a great chance for people to

work

as freelancers or exporters all around the world. Along with people's interest, I'm a freelancer and already have

advance

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knowledge regarding

work

and

earn

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earning

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digitally. Basically, I was working on

Amazone

but I had an American account

but

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apply

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now, I can create my personal account in Pakistan and I wouldn't give

percentage

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a percentage

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account

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the account

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holder.

However

, It's a very pleasant thing for me. Best wishes, Hafiz

Submitted by mahmood.hafiz2272 on Wed Apr 20 2022

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6 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you

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