Some people believe that professional workers such as doctors and teachers should be paid more than sports entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Few individuals incline to think that some employees
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as mentors and healthcare practitioners ought to
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paid
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more vis-a-vis sports athletes as well as celebrities. I, partially agree with
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notion. My position is justified
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with reasons and examples. On the one hand, it has
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believed
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mankind that doctors and
proffessors
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professors
are paid well as compared to other famous people.
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is because
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they are the pillar of society.
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means, surgeons, nurses and tutors contribute more
into
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the growth of
community
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the community
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. Many
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healthcare
professionals are working round the clock to save
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humans lives.
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, mentors are considered
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a source of immense knowledge. Many people are becoming successful n working for development in society
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as
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its
officers. They acquire the
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guidance
from their teachers.
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,
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interview conducted on
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the BBC
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news channel, the youngest
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officer Hasin Safan told the
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success
behind his post is the support of the tutors.
On the other hand
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, some people argue that famous personalities: actors,
athletes
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and athletes
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should be paid more amount of money.
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is because
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their career is too short.
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is to say, other professionals can work
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life till their older age while, athletes may
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repair
retire
retain
after certain age
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, to overcome the future expanse and uncertainty in the career they earn high money and it is justifiable. Another reason is,
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actors
are sacrifice
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their privacy. To elaborate on
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, almost all the renowned
celebraties
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celebrities
are not able to
hanging
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around in
city
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the city
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just like
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normal
perosn
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person
. They always need a
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security
with them.
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, all the ups and downs of their personal lives mention in newspapers. In conclusion, notwithstanding the health care members are providing the base for the development of
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the community
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by saving many lives and teaching youngsters to become successful respectively, the sports players as well as artists, giving unlimited entertainment and happiness to the community are paid more is logically acceptable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional workers
  • Societal contribution
  • Scarcity
  • Market forces
  • Consumer demand
  • Role models
  • Economic impact
  • Revenue generation
  • Fair compensation
  • Social equity
  • Intrinsic rewards
  • Job satisfaction
  • Media rights
  • Merchandise sales
  • Public figures
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