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Should government spend more money on improving roads and highways or should governments spend money on improving public transportation (buses,trains and subways)? Why? Use specifications and details to support your essay.

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Governments should spend equal
money
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 on improving
roads
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 and highways as well as for improving public transportation as they both are of importance to the country. We must have good
roads
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 and highways so that there will be minimal road accidents and
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good public transportation as not all people cannot afford to buy personal cars. If
roads
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 are not properly maintained they will develop potholes which will cause accidents and damage to the cars. All road signs and markings, as well as traffic lights, must be taken care of as well as they are part of
roads
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 and highways. They must be clear always and work perfectly to avoid accidents. Public transportation
department
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 should
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 get equal
money
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 so that they can buy new buses, trains and subways as well as for maintenance and servicing of the existing ones. Many people use public transport when going to work or school or shopping so transport should be available on time and the
roads
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 must be safe to travel on. To achieve all
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 there must be enough
money
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 for both departments. When workers arrive on time at work it means more production which boosts the country's economy. The governments should treat these two equally give allocate them the amount of
money
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 as they are essential and important to the country and people.
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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