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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe that it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is thought by some
people
 that environmental issues mostly
causing
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 by human activities should be fixed globally, while others claim that It is focused on nationally. I believe It is required to
addressed
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this
 problem
as
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international and I will discuss both aspects of
this
 claim in the following paragraphs. It is undeniable that
environmental
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 problems
of
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people
facing
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is
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 increasing
people
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 concern.
Firstly
, It is thought by some
countries
 that
this
 trouble should be settled nationally as authorities in
this
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 regions claim that they have to tackle more disorientation.
Secondly
, they are more capable of analyzing the reasons of owing to
environmental
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an environmental
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problem
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such
 as the pollution and global warming.
Therefore
,
This
result
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 in
increase
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of
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 awareness locally to gain
better
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 approach.
On the other hand
, approaching
this
 issue globally may increase the consciousness of society and
this
 is more likely to result in positive outcomes. To illustrate, some
countries
such
 as China and USA, due to manufacturing more
product
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products
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 than other
countries
, releasing
to
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 the atmosphere carbon dioxide and other hazardous gases, are not prone to agreement
of
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on
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 stopping environmental
offenses
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.
Therefore
,
countries
of
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using their mainstream media to raise awareness global scale may aid to stop the reasons owing to environmental issues. In conclusion, even though It is accepted by some crowd that environmental problems have to be handled locally,
however
, a great
amount
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 of
people
 including me, argue that
merely
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 solution should be universal.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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