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There is a public park near where you live. You have heard that the local council wants to sell this park. Write a letter to a local newspaper in your letter : introduce yourself, describe the importance of the park, say what action you will take if the council continues with the plan.

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Dear sir/madame I proposed
this
 letter to inform you
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 event which is going to happen in our local area. I am
farid
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Farid
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 and writing to you from Mahdasht city, Alborz province. Recently, I have realized from local council officials accidentally that they had decided to sell
public
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 park near us called Hamoon at auction to build a large commercial and administrative building due to
financial
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 crisis. I was really impressed by hearing that because
firstly
, there are many alive and green trees or plants that apart from their benefits for the local weather and scene of the place, must be transferred precisely in order to not be damaged or died since their
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 will go yellow even by a slight mistake in movement.
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, due to
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 of historical buildings behind the park, building heights in
this
 area must be as per rules and
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 not to cover
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 of those ancient spots. Despite several announcements to city authorities ,nobody takes care
thus
 I state now if
this
 plan is not changed or postponed in the
next
 few
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, I will follow international laws and send an appeal to United Nations Educational,Scientific, Cultural
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(UNESCO) to investigate
this
 urgent issue directly. I hope
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spring into an action to investigate similar critics too and preserve our environment and historical values more. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully
Submitted by farid.detective on

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