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Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others believe it is a waste of money since people can access the internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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There are some individuals that feel that the government should be providing towns with more libraries that are free to use. While other people have their opinion, that kind of money could be spent better on other things since there are a lot of folks who sit at home and are capable of reaching the internet to obtain the information they seek. I believe it is important to at least have one library around a residential area to provide children and grownups with history and fairy tales. Having a facility where individuals can have a place to read a good thriller book or a research book will give them access to knowledge.
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, in Scandinavia, the parents are using the resources provided by the libraries to read
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 their kids at night time.
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 has shown later in life that their child is reading faster and more efficient than other kids in the same class. It has
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 been proven by a university in Stockholm who
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 testing
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 theory on a range of young children in 2018.
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give them
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having people search on Google would let them dig in deeper and follow the tracks of the information. By using a library, you are essentially borrowing a product and have to keep
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 it to the facility in a set time frame. In saying
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 since it does give residents resources and I myself prefer holding a book in my hand rather than reading it over the phone or computer.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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