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It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both the opinion and give your own views .

#internet #communication #people #place #information
Recently years, the
internet
 is playing the main role in human life. It gives
the
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them
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 opportunities to
people
 communicate with each other,
find
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finds
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information
 and exchange any data between them. In my opinion, one of the biggest negative
things
of
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 finding
information
from
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 the
internet
 is getting unauthentic
information
. Because
,
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 everyone can put
information
into
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on
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 the
internet
 without any filter.
Therefore
,
people
 face to risk wash their
brain
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by
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with
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 false and fake
information
. So,
people
 should analyze the
information
 on the
internet
 in order to prevent
wash
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 their
brain
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.
Otherwise
, we can change our channel to receive any
information
 and we can use
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
magazine
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magazines
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instead
 of the
internet
. Even we can find authentic
information
 from the newspaper and magazines,
but
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those
things
 have
also
 pros and cons.
For example
, getting and finding
information
 from the newspaper and magazines are taking the time and it can be more costly compared with
internet
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.
Finally
, we all
khow
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know
 that there
is
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 no perfect
things
 in the world because all
things
 have advantages and disadvantages.
Thus
,
people
 should know
that
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what kind of
information
 they can seek from the available sources.
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