Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In
21st
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century, most of the world's population prefers to travel abroad for pleasure. One part of the
people
believe
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believes
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that
this
incorrectly affects the
countries
in which these
people
have vacationed, while others do not agree with
this
statement.I completely disagree with
this
statement, as tourism promotes the economy and culture of the
host
countries
. On the one hand,
tourists
can harm the
countries
they have visited.
Firstly
, among ordinary
tourists
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there may be criminals who may defy the established rules in
countries
.
Secondly
, it is the harm that the ecology of the
host
country
receives.
For example
, according to volunteer companies, the amount of garbage left by
tourists
from other
countries
is growing,
in famous
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tourist places of Kazakhstan.
On the other hand
, visiting foreign
countries
has a list of advantages for both the
host
country
and
tourists
.
Firstly
, tourism improves the
country
's economy, promotes tourism companies,
the
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country
's attractions around the world and
also
increases the employment of the population.
Secondly
,
this
is a good opportunity to find a new social environment and friends for everyone. While
traveling
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travelling
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, a person can meet
people
who are
also
visiting the assigned
country
or meet
people
from the
host
country
, which will broaden
people
's minds and help in future promotion. In conclusion, the pros outweigh the cons and visiting other
countries
for pleasure will improve many aspects of these
countries
and the identity of
tourists
should be checked so that they do not harm
countries
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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