Nowadays, tourism is developing flourishingly and more and more people   travel abroad. When people visit others countries, facing the local customs   and behaviors, should imitate it or not, there is a hot debate.

Some
people
hold that we should imitate the local
customs
and
behaviors
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of   the foreign country. First of all, respect is one of the most important   factors
while
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we visit
others
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countries. Understanding and following their   
way
of life shows our respect for the local
people
and
thus
makes it easier   to establish good
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with them.
Secondly
, many embarrassments and   conflicts are
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results
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of differences in
custom
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and traditions between the   tourists and the locals, the solution to which would be for the visitors to   
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and imitate local
culture
and
behaviors
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. If we don’t   experience their
customs
and
behaviors
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by ourselves, it is hard to   understand the local
people
and
culture
. By doing things
according to
their   
custom
, we can better understand them and become more tolerant toward   differences, the very quality that enable us to live in harmony.
Thirdly
,   
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foreign
custom
and
traditional
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always seems fascinating to visitors   from other parts of the world, the
imitating
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of which makes the
travelers
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  life more
colorful
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.   On the other side,
however
, those who oppose the above viewpoint believe   that the host country should welcome
culture different
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cultural differences
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. In the first place,   as a kind of unofficial ambassadors,
travelers
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bring
different
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culture
to   the destination country, which not only enriches their lives but promote   
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as well.
Besides
, imitating is not the best or the   only
way
to understand
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local
customs
and
behaviors
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well. The   understanding of the foreign
culture
also
can be through careful observing   and intently perceiving. What’s more, for any nation to preserve its   unique
culture
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heritages
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,
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has to first embrace cultural
difference
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differences
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in   order to increase the awareness of its own
culture
for its citizens. In   addition, it is unrealistic to expect visitors coming after to readily pick   up the local
custom
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customs
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for their own
culture
and deep-tooted and dearest to   them. And we are experiencing a kind of cultural integration, whose   advantages far outweigh its disadvantages.   
People
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both sides have their own sound
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to support their opinions.   Taking all the above into consideration, to be honest, it is difficult for   me to make a decision and I have to hold a balance point of view. It is   need not
to
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imitate
the
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foreign
customs
and
behaviors
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completely, and at   the same time, understanding the local
culture
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this
kind of
way
is   not a bad
way
.
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