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Some people say that individuals should change jobs during their working life often while others believe that doing the same job has advantages to individuals, companies, and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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t has been argued by a few masses that
people
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 must switch from one job to another in their span of employment; while
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, staying at the same place is more advantageous for employees, the organisation as well as the
community
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. My inclination goes with the latter view that I am going to express in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 off, those who believe that making a shift in the workforce is mandatory for the person.
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, there are higher chances of getting a big sum of
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 as income. So, a bigger salary will help them in getting all the amenities
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 as luxury cars, bungalows and
people
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 can lead a lavish lifestyle.
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, they will get a chance to enjoy a cosmopolitan ambience. As it is seen that working in a multicultural society,
people
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 exchange their ideas and experiences.
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, they will have more mutual understanding, and they will be able to learn essential skills like tolerance feeling of brotherhood and to name but a few.
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 but not least, sometimes a change in a person’s
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 is indispensable to satisfy one’s thirst for exploring
life
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.
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, staying in the same position is considered beneficial for the
community
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,
personnel
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 and any firm.
Personnel
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 do plenty of services for making the
life
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 of
community
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people
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 convenient.
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, if a
company
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 is established in a local
area
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,
then
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 the locals build their trust in it, and that
company
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 will always focus on the needs of
people
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, and it will manufacture the products according to their needs and even at discounted rates.
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, it is lucrative for the growth of a
company
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 and its staff.
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, it gives a way to appoint workers from the local
area
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, and it saves the
money
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of
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 the
company
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.
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, the
money
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that is
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 spent on providing accommodation, transportation and on naming but a few
On the other hand
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, staying in the same position is considered beneficial for the
community
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,
personnel
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 and any firm.
Personnel
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 do plenty of services for making the
life
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 of
community
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people
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 convenient.
For example
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, if a
company
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 is established in a local
area
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,
then
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 the locals build their trust in it, and that
company
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 will always focus on the needs of
people
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, and it will manufacture the products according to their needs and even at discounted rates.
Therefore
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, it is lucrative for the growth of a
company
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 and its staff.
In addition
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, it gives a way to appoint workers from the local
area
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, and it saves the
money
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of
Change preposition
for
show examples
 the
company
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.
For instance
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, the
money
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that is
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 spent on providing accommodation, transportation and on naming but a few

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