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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer.

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Discovering other intelligent
beings
 has been a discussion spurred among either media or scientists for decades. While a few scientists believe that it is necessary to approach extra-terrestrial
beings
, some of them deteriorate its positive outcome. Both sides of the debate would be discussed here. On the one hand, the continued extra-terrestrial contact has given substantial platforms to apprehend their thought process, ranging from their abilities to enhance scientific and technological discoveries to planet preservation. Take an example of
last
 year’s NASA terrestrial discovery called “Oumuamua”, an aircraft capable of
space
 travel up to one billion years away. Scientists explained that
this
 advanced technology utilizes energy from the sun to enable
space
 travel with the speed of light which lead humans to consider eco-friendly energy.
Hence
, cooperating with interstellar
beings
 might spark a chance to enrich valuable information and will contribute to solving some of mankind’s most pressuring issues like excessive use of non-degradable energy and exploitation of natural resources.
Conversely
, sending
earth
 information to
space
 leads to alien civilization as opposed to the verge of prosperity that might go with it. Take the case of the invasion of America in the 19th century in which thousands of Indians were exiled from their native lands.
Similarly
, other
beings
 that possess more superior knowledge than humans would likely be invaders and with the right number and resources,
earth
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the earth
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 might likely be colonized by them.
Moreover
, the more information dispersed about the
earth
 in
space
 the more obvious for them to find out how damaging human actions could be toward the
earth
. Global warming, flood, deforestation, and pollution are some of the issues to be solved without intervention from the outside world
otherwise
 humans are prone to be eradicated by aliens because of their destructive
behavior
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. Overall, denying to start communication with other intelligent creatures has a stronger argument at present.
Instead
 of spending ways to start a connection with
beings
 that have not been known entirely, it would be wise to spend investment on planetary civilization to restore what has been lost on
earth
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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