IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Many people believe that living in a city life offers greater benefits as compared to the countryside? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In
this
Linking Words
 day and age, place of living has become a salient aspect of one’s
life
Use synonyms
. As we all know, different
people
Use synonyms
 have radically different preferences over where to live. It has been seen that some individuals prefer to live in urbanized
cities
Use synonyms
 as it provides more opportunities in comparison to living in rural
areas
Use synonyms
. Residing in a big city offers
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
show examples
better
facilities
Use synonyms
 and it helps
people
Use synonyms
 to build a better
career
Use synonyms
life
Use synonyms
 by providing a variety of
work
Use synonyms
 options.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, urbanized
areas
Use synonyms
 are usually equipped with better
facilities
Use synonyms
 that
increases
Change the verb form
increase
show examples
quality
Add an article
the quality
show examples
 of
life
Use synonyms
 for
people
Use synonyms
. Medical institutes are more enhanced and prepared, they contain more advanced medical technology that can aid in treating most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the diseases. Different university branches are
also
Linking Words
 present in big
cities
Use synonyms
 with more study fields and options.
Moreover
Linking Words
, urbanized
areas
Use synonyms
 have a greater selection of different food choices,
thus
Linking Words
 residents can try a wide variety of restaurants.
For instance
Linking Words
,
people
Use synonyms
 residing in
cities
Use synonyms
 have access to food from different parts of the world, and for
them
Add a comma
,them
show examples
 it is more accessible
comparable
Replace the word
compared
show examples
 to
people
Use synonyms
 living in villages. Admittedly, being in a big
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
city open
wide
Add an article
a wide
show examples
 door for
people
Use synonyms
 to try and take advantage of
different
Correct article usage
the different
show examples
facilities
Use synonyms
 that
available
Add a missing verb
are available
show examples
. Other than
this
Linking Words
, advanced
areas
Use synonyms
 are hubs for golden
career
Use synonyms
 opportunities. Urbanized
areas
Use synonyms
 provide plenty of job offers that can accommodate many
people
Use synonyms
 with different skills. Doctors, engineers, and even uneducated individuals can find suitable
work
Use synonyms
environment
Fix the agreement mistake
environments
show examples
 and practice their jobs. To illustrate, an electrical engineer has a way higher chance of finding a good
work
Use synonyms
 offer with a high salary if they live in a big city rather than
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
 countryside. Admittedly, more
work
Use synonyms
 opportunities provided in big
cities
Use synonyms
 are extremely important for personal and
career
Use synonyms
 growth. All in all, it seems that residing in an urbanized area
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
show examples
 a
postive
Correct your spelling
positive
 impact on
someones
Change to a genitive case
someone's
show examples
life
Use synonyms
 and
career
Use synonyms
. Big
cities
Use synonyms
 contain more
facilities
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
 as hospitals and universities, that
aim
Change the verb form
aims
show examples
 to make
Use synonyms
people
Change noun form
people's
show examples
life
Use synonyms
 easier in many ways. Job offers are widely diverse and numerous in
cities
Use synonyms
,
thus
Linking Words
 it can accommodate different
people
Use synonyms
 with different skills. The world would definitely be a better place if
people
Use synonyms
 took advantage of all the
chance
Fix the agreement mistake
chances
show examples
 that big
cities
Use synonyms
 provide and understood how to live in it correctly.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: