You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information. Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation. Write at lease 150 words.

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Dear Sir, My name is Edward Bonny and I am a regular reader of your travel magazine "Safari". I am writing

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letter to draw your kind attention to something which I think is inaccurate in the magazine.

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, I am extremely amazed at the content of the magazine.

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, I found some information

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not correct about my city Bangalore. Recently, I read that the population of my city is one million which is wrong statistics. In fact, the population in my city is one billion. I propound that the basic details in any literature should be accurate since these details are the dominant source of general awareness to the readers. To overcome

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situation, I think it would be better to publish precise details in the

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edition which will not only correct the content but

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generate a good reputation for publishing facts. I hope you will find

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letter helpful and I am looking forward to reading your

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edition. Yours Faithfully, Edward Bonny

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

169 words

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