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it is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age . Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion ? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

#children #difference #right #age #punishment #distinction #sort #parents #teachers #behaviour
The line graph illustrates four different types of material in one nation, that
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 recycled between the period 1982-2010. Glass containers and Aluminium can recycling rate increase.
In contrast
, the Paper and Cardboard rate decreases.
However
, Plastics remain constant. Glass Containers begin with 50% in the year 1982 which increases up to 60% in 2010.
Similarly
, Aluminum cans proportion started with the lowest figure of approximately 5% in the period 1986 and gradually reached about 40% at the end of the period which is 35% difference. Paper and Cardboard recycling reached its peak of 80% in 1994 and significantly reduce with a difference of 10% in 2010.
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, Plastics are the only material
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recycled with unnoticeable numbers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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