Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a compony and organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the advantages of being self employed?

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prefer to have their own job or
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of work for another factory or organisation.It has a lot of reasons and demerits, some of which will be elaborated
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be their own
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, when
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career not only have they more flexible times but
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they have more
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, when we have a disease we can rest at home easily, or whenever we want we can go to travel.
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the average of their
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it is easy to have their own vocation without any workers Since, they do not
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these kind of
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are more successful. Noting apply the negative footprints of being self-employed one of them is the lots of responsibility so that the
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who are
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have a lot of duties to do
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as pay for employees insurance fees and their salaries since if bosses do not pay their salaries on time they would have  leave their job because workers work for
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, if they have a problem in their own career they have to be in charge of everything almost I mean they are responsible for everything in their work. To wrap up what was mentioned above, being self-employed neither is bad nor good since it depends on
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’s characteristics if someone is not responsible cannot be their own
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or if someone needs a lucrative source of revenue must choose self-employed.
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