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Some people prefer to work same job throughout their life while others like to change their jobs. Give your opinion.

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It is often argued that some
people
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the same
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same
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some
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 jobs in their life while others believe that changing a
job
help
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helps
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 them for
better
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a better
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 future.
This
 essay will discuss both
the
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opinions.
Firstly
, there are many reasons that
people
 do
same
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job
 in their life
such
 as
job
 security. Many government employees
doing
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do
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 a
job
 in a department for around 30 to 40 years because of
job
 security they believe that
its
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it's
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 better for their career.
Moreover
, many professional
people
 work in
a
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 same field because they believe that it enhances their skills and high salary. Many companies prefer high experience
people
 so if someone works for a long time in a company that helps them to boost their salaries.
However
, many prefer to change their jobs for gaining
a
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knowledge or betterment
of
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future
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the future
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. Many professionals believe that changing a
job
 is a requirement for a better future. There are many employees who prefer to change their skills because they believe that
technology
 is growing rapidly so learning a new skill
adopt
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 the
technology
 is
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a need
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need
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of
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in
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today
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today's
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 society.
Furthermore
, new
technology
also
boost
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in
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salary so mostly
people
wants
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want
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 to update their skills for
high
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a high
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 salary. To conclude, there is no doubt that doing a
job
 in
same
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 field provides security to the
people
, but there is a need
of
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for
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 change because of
advance
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technology
 or better financial needs.
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