Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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It is true money than that famous

athlete

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can earn more many than other professional

works

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. Many

people

think it is justified but some

people

also

have different a side of view.

Firstly

sports

professionals have spent almost all of their time by

praticisting

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participating

. And they have to train since they were young.

However

, some

althletes

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athletes

are not successful but they already spent all their younger days

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doing training. In

this

case, we can see that they have to risk their lives to

be succeed

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. Apart from

this

, athletes represent our countries and made us proud

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their hard work,

Moreover

, playing

sports

is really more tired than

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, they have a time limit with

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other jobs.

On the other hand

, there are many professional jobs that contribute to the

people

.As an example, doctors save

people

's lives and they still don't get as much as

sports

professionals.

In addition

, teachers are contributing to society by teaching uneducated children. And

also

engineers are building bridges and roads for country development. In conclusion, it is not acceptable that

sports

athletes can earn that much money because there are many professionals who are contributing to our society more than athletes.

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

200 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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financial remuneration
exceptional
merit
talent
demand
entertainment value
career span
physical demands
justified
unfair
criticism
income inequality
societal priorities
sportsmanship

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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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You want to join a local club or organization. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter: - Introduce yourself and explain why you are interested. - Ask about membership requirements. - Enquire about the next meeting or event.

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