Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

It is predicted that there will not be a driver in the cars and buses a bunch of years later and there will be enough technology for producing driverless vehicles. it is a fact that there are both pros and cons, but I assume that standing
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disadvantages deserves the existence of the advantages.
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the negative effects these days driving is regarded as a
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of entertaining yourself and having fun but when the car is driving by itself, it is obvious that
this
kind of feeling will disappear and obviously
people
will be anxious at
first
. Newest technologies are always hard to afford. There is a belief that why should we put more money
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buying a driverless car when we have the ability to drive a car by ourselves which is a logical explanation, but it depends on the person's personality and what they value the most in their life.
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amount of
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that being calm while driving deserves
this
increase in the payment.
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the ways that
people
use for enjoying
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driving will disappear,
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you can't make the assumption that transferring from one place to another by driverless machines is not fun. I assume that
people
will find new ways to entertain themselves and
also
bi believe that they will have more fun because they are calmer and the calmer moments, the better experiences. Nowadays we can see that
people
especially parents are always in a hurry for different stuff, but when these cars take place in the future, there will not be lots of anxiousness in
people
because their children can transfer
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their own and there will not be any problem. In conclusion,
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, in my opinion, there are more advantages than disadvantages and I assume that we can think about negative effects as a change in
people
's lifestyle and part of the process in human life.
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