Parents of obese children shoul be punished for making them fat. Do you agree or disagree
It is argued that
parents
of obese children
should be punished for no
providing their Correct your spelling
not
children
with a healthy lifestyle, and as a consequence
they will get fat. Add a comma
,consequence
This
essay disagree
with the statement because many Change the verb form
disagrees
parents
will need help and advice on how they support their children
development and they can Change noun form
children's
also
need economic support to have time
to spend with their kids.
Firstly
, many parents
don't have any experience or knowledge on how to provide a healthy Correct your spelling
lifestyle
life style
to their Correct your spelling
lifestyle
children
, for
instance
a Add the comma(s)
,instance
well balanced
diet and keep them active. Add a hyphen
well-balanced
In addition
, a well balanced
diet will give Add a hyphen
well-balanced
the
necessary nutrients for them Correct pronoun usage
them the
be
fit and enjoy good health. Fix the infinitive
to be
Furthermore
, nutritive food will help them with psicological
and physical development. Correct your spelling
psychological
Children
being active is essential as they by nature are moving around all the time
. For example
, taking them to the park when they are small for cicling
, running or playing tennis Correct your spelling
cycling
circling
it
will create a habit, that they will keep later in life. A study found that Correct pronoun usage
apply
children
with poor nutrition,
Remove the comma
apply
is
more likely to have diabetes type 2 when they grow up.
Change the verb form
are
Secondly
, they are many mothers and fathers that don't spend enough time
with their children
, because they don't earn enough money, and they will be working long hours. Thus
, this
Correct determiner usage
these
parents
needs
to be Change the verb form
need
ecconomically
supported. Correct your spelling
economically
For example
, given
them vouchers to buy healthy food, helping them to pay some house bills, Replace the word
giving
this
may help them to spend quality Correct pronoun usage
apply
time
, and feed them in a healthy way. Also
, they will have time
to pick up their children
at school and take them to the park and enjoy some activities together. Moreover
, the children
is
not only keeping physically fit and emotionally stableChange the verb form
are
,
Add the word(s)
but,
also
, they will
be able to make a durable bond with their family. A study found that Add the word(s)
but they will also
parents
taking their children
to recreative activities, when they grow up is more likely to them enjoy exercising outdoors and be Correct your spelling
more
m ore
confident.
To summarise, Correct your spelling
more
parent
should not be punished for making Add an article
the parent
a parent
ther
Correct your spelling
their
the
children
fat, but I strongly believe if government help them ecconomically
they will be able to do a lot for their family, and educating Correct your spelling
economically
parents
is extremely important as many of them wont
have the right information.Add an apostrophe
won't
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