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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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It is considered by some that working for the same company all their
work
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-life/career is a good thing.
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, others argue that it is better to have multiple experiences of
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 by changing the company often. In my opinion, a
job
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 is an important element of our life and when someone needs to develop himself and for an excellent
carrier
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career
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 it is a good idea to change the company who someone works for. On the one hand, some people believe that working in a different corporation has many advantages. That means that people who
work
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 for
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different
organization
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organizations
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 can have the opportunity to develop themselves in many aspects of their professional
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lives
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.
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, one aspect can be financial satisfaction with a
job
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. When a person works as a nurse in a small hospital and his salary is too low and the task too high that can make him very unsatisfied. But when the same individual looks and finds an employer that pays more for the same performance
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, it makes him happier.
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, self-development at
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 can be satisfied through a new
job
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 too.
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 why, I, believe,
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 a lot of experience with different employers can be positive for employees.
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, there are those
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 believe that working in the same organization for a long time is a good thing. For those, individuals the factor to change something in their life may be terrifying because they don’t want to leave the safe space that they have created all those years.
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, someone prefers to do the same task day over day over developing himself in his
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 or career.
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 can lead to monotony over a long time. I strongly believe that those individuals have very early health problems.
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, working all the time in the same organization without a change is not a healthy thing. Mostly those people are unsatisfied and unhappy. Individuals with a lot of
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 experience are happy and satisfied with their
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-life and successful in their
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careers
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task response
Make sure to address all parts of the prompt clearly. Provide a more balanced argument by considering counterarguments and addressing them effectively.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your ideas by using clear transitions between sentences and paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph relates to the main topic and supports your thesis statement.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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