It is more important to invest in further education rather than to gain work experience after finishing university in order to find a good job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some think investing in

further

education

after

graduated

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from university is the key to

find

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a good job, while some claim that getting working

experience

is more critical to

have

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a better occupation. Personally speaking, I agree with both ideas as both of them

plays

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an important role in the workplace.

To begin

with,

further

education

increases your professional knowledge which allows you

becoming

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more competitive. Nowadays, the amount of

degree

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that a youth

studied

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increases

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.

For instance

, about 77% of managers or bosses have studied a management degree after they graduated from university. The reason why they study

this

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degree is to prove their ability in managing a large

amount

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of workers so that their chance

in

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becoming the boss booms. Meanwhile, based on some research, the heads are more willing to give opportunities to those with more degrees as having

further

education

symbolizes hardworking, and desiring to get improvement or progression, which is better to lead a team to achieve a better result. Yet, does that mean

working

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experience

is useless? It is definitely a 'no'. With more working

experience

, the higher the employees' ability in handling or

habitating

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habituating

the working environment is.

This

idea is commonly 'planted' among the heads'

thought

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. Especially in the occupation which requires practical

experiences

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experience

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,

such

as nurses, doctors, or physiotherapists. If a person has more working

experience

in related fields,

this

symbolizes that they are more passionate

in

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these occupations and with a higher opportunity to handle hardships.

For example

, nurses with more working

experience

are more capable of communicating with other medical professionals, while therapists with more

experience

are more capable

in

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communicating with patients. Hardly can students learn these practical skills when they are in school.

Thus

, owning more

experience

helps

getting

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a good job. In conclusion, despite

further

education

brings

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bringing

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more professional knowledge, working

experience

results in a higher capability in occupation. Both can make a higher chance

in

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of

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getting a better job and none of

its

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impacts should be underestimated or ignored.