Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others think people should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are various types of
sports
among
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our life, some are safe and
strength
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the body while others are dangerous even may hurt
body
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the body
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.
Therefore
, some
people
suggest that
such
sports
full of
dangerous
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dangers
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should be banned by
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government
goverment
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, while others keep the opposite viewpoint and think should let athletes and fans
to
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choose
in
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free. In my view, it is necessary to maintain dangerous
sports
and let
people
free to choose.
Danerous
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Dangerous
sports
are
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a danger
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danger
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for
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people
's
body
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bodies
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and life, it may hurt
the
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attendance and bring deeply hurt to their families,
some
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and some
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of them may even cause death in serious.
For example
, diving which is popular and welcomed among the whole world especially
in
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island
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, while it
is frequently cause
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death for
trourists
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tourists
because of the changing flow.
Therefore
, society and government should pay more attention
on
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to
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these dangerous
sports
and warm participants aware of the risks and ban
people
who take participant
in
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apply
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without professional
councel
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counsel
council
and
practise
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practice
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.
However
, we should not deny the advantage of dangerous
sports
though
it
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they
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may cause
positive
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a positive
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consequence
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consequences
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.
People
who will learn build brave and energy to face their
challenge
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challenges
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and problems in their actual life when they join
a dangerous
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dangerous sports
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sports
,
such
as learning never
give
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up from marathon competition, gaining a self-help ability through swimming.
Moreover
, doing exercise is
also
a method
to
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relaxing
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.
People
can freely choose which type of
sports
they like and enjoy and learn from it.
As
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all
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the aforementioned, it is necessary to let
people
choose the subject of
sports
in their way.
However
, it does not means government should not take any action and let it go.
Instead
, relevant authorities should warn
people
the
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risks and advertise the
peotential
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potential
potentially
dangerous
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dangers
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in some
sports
area
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areas
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and sensitive locations which happen cash frequently.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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