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Teenagers are having too much screen time. what are the consequences. how to deal with it?

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 are having too much
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time
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”suggests that most
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the
teenagers
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 aged 8 to 12 have smartphones and laptops these days.They don’t get their eyes off of
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 for long hours. Scientists believe that nowadays
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 spend 20
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houres
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 a week on
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. On the one hand, it amuses them and develops their knowledge.
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 , It’s dangerous for their eyes sight and it weakens their eyesight. What’s important is the consequences of spending too much
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 on
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 for young people that parents need to be informed about.
Teenagers
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 use digital devices mostly for entertainment. They enjoy playing games,
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 ,whereas they spend little
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 or creating content through digital media. So the main purpose of digital devices is for entertainment. An important concern is that there is
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 they get addicted to phones. It’s important for young people to spend
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 with their family and friends. Spending too much
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 on
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smart phones
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 can affect their ability to learn and do their homework. Studies show that excessive
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 at an early age can impact their mental health, they are more likely to become aggressive in future. They learn social skills in society
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 on their smartphones. Nothing can replace face to face communication.
Teenagers
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 need to have limited hours on
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 in order to avoid addiction to smartphones. Considering both advantages and disadvantages of
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, parents should let their
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 use technology and new gadgets meanwhile they need to be aware of
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consequences for their children.
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