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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
In general,
developing
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country
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 should provide free study and medicine to every citizen. I completely agree that the
people
 should get
benefit
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 from their government. In
this
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easy
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 I will explain my opinion and give example.
First
 of all, each person has the right to get free
learn
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 and hospitals. If the person has
good
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 developing
country
 and
paying
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tax
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than
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 they have the right to get free education and medicine.
For example
, in
Denmark
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people
 get gratis teaching and hospital because they pay 25% of tax. If the population working and paying the tax and helping to
developed
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 the
country
 and
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its leader
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leadership
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leader ship
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.
Furthermore
, the government should help the
people
 to get
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a job
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job
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easy
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. If there is a planet of work
provide
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 by the
responsible
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 than
the
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then
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 society will be in a good condition. For
instant
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, in
Turkey
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 it is difficult to get
job
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a job
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 because of the high
of
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the
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population.
Finally
, in my opinion, there is a lot of sickens and
weakness
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people
need
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who need
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 help and medicines. the young
people
 that have
education
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the education
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 they can help and
also
 the land became
more
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a more
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 developing
country
. In conclusion, free learning makes a lot of improvement
in
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 the
cite
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site
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. As I said, if the government help the
people
 to get work it is easy to everyone to develop
there
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their
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 life.
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