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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
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In general,
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country
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 should provide free study and medicine to every citizen. I completely agree that the
people
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 should get
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 from their government. In
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easy
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 I will explain my opinion and give example.
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 of all, each person has the right to get free
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 and hospitals. If the person has
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tax
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 they have the right to get free education and medicine.
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 get gratis teaching and hospital because they pay 25% of tax. If the population working and paying the tax and helping to
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 and
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, the government should help the
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job
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. If there is a planet of work
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 by the
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 society will be in a good condition. For
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 because of the high
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population.
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, in my opinion, there is a lot of sickens and
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people
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need
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 help and medicines. the young
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 that have
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 they can help and
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 the land became
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. In conclusion, free learning makes a lot of improvement
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. As I said, if the government help the
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 to get work it is easy to everyone to develop
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 life.
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