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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

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Social networking websites like Facebook, Instagram and Youtube have become an important part of our everyday life.
However
, it is argued that these sites have had a huge
negetive
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negative
impact
 on both individuals and
community
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the community
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. I strongly agree with the thought that social websites have had a disadvantageous
impact
 on
people
.
To begin
 with, social networking sites have started hunting relationships. In the present world,
people
 spend a lot of
time
 online.
Therefore
, they do not have
time
 to visit their friends or relatives.
As a result
, relationships have become shallow.
For instance
,
inthe
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in the
 earlier days, individuals used to get-togethers at least once a month, but nowadays most
of
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the
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people
 do not even know many of their relatives.
Consequently
, there are no close helpful
relationsips
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relationships
 in
this
 area. In
case
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 of societies and local communities, Facebook has had a negative
impact
 on their lives. They now prefer to take part in activities online rather than physical activities.
For example
, some
people
 would rather stay in and browse
on
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social networking sites
instead
 of participating
events
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in events
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 with family, friends or
local
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the local
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 community.
Additionally
, society as a whole is
also
 becoming increasingly scattered and
discreted
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discrete
discredited
discretion
 as
people
 spend more
time
 online with
people
 they have never met face to face and who they are unlikely to ever meet in the future. Another negative
impact
 is that
usage
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users
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 of social networking
site
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sites
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promotung
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promoting
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle in
the
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society as
people
 these days are spending more
time
indoor
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indoors
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 than ever, with eyes glued to their screens. Taking everything into consideration, if we know to use it properly, it will be useful for each other. I suggest that you take responsibility for what you do, the important thing is that we use them. how to use them rationally and usefully
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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