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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

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Social networking websites like Facebook, Instagram and Youtube have become an important part of our everyday life.
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, it is argued that these sites have had a huge
negetive
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negative
impact
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 on both individuals and
community
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the community
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. I strongly agree with the thought that social websites have had a disadvantageous
impact
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 on
people
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.
To begin
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 with, social networking sites have started hunting relationships. In the present world,
people
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 spend a lot of
time
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 online.
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, they do not have
time
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 to visit their friends or relatives.
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, relationships have become shallow.
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,
inthe
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in the
 earlier days, individuals used to get-togethers at least once a month, but nowadays most
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people
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 do not even know many of their relatives.
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, there are no close helpful
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relationships
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 area. In
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the case
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 of societies and local communities, Facebook has had a negative
impact
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 on their lives. They now prefer to take part in activities online rather than physical activities.
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, some
people
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 would rather stay in and browse
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social networking sites
instead
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 of participating
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in events
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 with family, friends or
local
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the local
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 community.
Additionally
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, society as a whole is
also
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 becoming increasingly scattered and
discreted
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discrete
discredited
discretion
 as
people
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 spend more
time
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 online with
people
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 they have never met face to face and who they are unlikely to ever meet in the future. Another negative
impact
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 is that
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 of social networking
site
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sites
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promotung
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promoting
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle in
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society as
people
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 these days are spending more
time
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indoor
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indoors
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 than ever, with eyes glued to their screens. Taking everything into consideration, if we know to use it properly, it will be useful for each other. I suggest that you take responsibility for what you do, the important thing is that we use them. how to use them rationally and usefully
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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