Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is generally acknowledged by certain individuals that
people
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have different aptitudes depending on
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gender
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, and
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they should have different occupations. Regarding
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, I strongly agree with
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assertion. 
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with,
people
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have different abilities depending on
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sex. While the right side of the brain which enhances the ability of science and mathematics of men is developed, the development of the left side of the brain which helps to increase the quality of linguistic and artistic skills in women can be seen.
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, recent media in Korea reports that
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prefer to hire women teachers as they believe
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difference
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brains. As the example clearly illustrates,
people
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have different qualifications owing to
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biological development, so it is a good idea to find different
jobs
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depending on
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gender
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.
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, some occupations require only one
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owing to the difference
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the
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physical abilities. Some
jobs
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such
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as military service
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consist of males because as a matter of cultural
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, some male soldiers look down on women soldiers.
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, as female soldiers’ bodies are more vulnerable, they cannot handle the same amount of work
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male soldiers.
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, the majority of
crimes’
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victims are females in
army
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.
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, it is reasonable to point out that it is not a good idea
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gender
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have
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the same
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. In conclusion, owing to
biological
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a biological
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and physical
difference
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differences
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between genders, it is no doubt to point out that they should have different
jobs
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depending on the occupation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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