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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think it will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

#development #tourism #english #language #world #people
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English has now become the global
language
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 due to tourism development. Some declared that
people
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 will only speak English in near future. Obviously, there will be pros and cons of having one
language
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 in the world and
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pros
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 and cons of
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 of all, the most outstanding benefit of having
single
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language
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 is eliminating
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 barriers. So, there will be no misunderstanding among
people
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 and they will be brought together intimately.
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, having similarities in communication
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 means that
people
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 will not obtain the feeling of uniqueness.
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,
people
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 cannot easily define the differences between each other.
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, only one
language
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 can unite different countries by avoiding conflicts and close relationships will be developed to enhance important sectors of each country,
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, trading.
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, it is not sure that
single
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language
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 will be eliminated every problem of different
people
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.
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, even me and my family speak the same
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, we often have
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 according to our own opinions.
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 but not least,
single
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a single
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language
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 has
prominent
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a prominent
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 effect on education. Students do not need to spend their time
to understand
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 another
language
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 if they want to pursue their education in a foreign country
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 my sister who had to spend almost two years
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learning Japanese to study
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for a
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master
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 degree
of
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 engineering.
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,
people
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 who enjoy
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learning
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 different languages
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 as polyglots will claim that having
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 is
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 enormous disadvantage for them.
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,
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 there will be advantages and disadvantages of having one
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 in the world, I personally believe that it is unlikely to happen in our future as our world is constituted by various cultures and traditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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