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Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it is widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we should not follow them and that we should dress in what we like. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#fashion #trends #clothes #people #dress
It’s
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the truth
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truth
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 that
fashion
trends
 have become a vital and essential part
in
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of
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 some
people
’s daily life. And
people
 who are eager to get with time usually spend
amount
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the amount
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 of
money
 and time to get with time. Nowadays, there are a variety of ways
such
 as
magazine
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magazines
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, TV
show
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shows
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,
fashion
youtuber
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YouTuber
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 and social media for
fashion
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the fashion
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 industry to
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brainwash
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brain wash
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people
the
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 importance of
fashion
.
In addition
,
fashion
 is a critical element for companies to sell their
clothes
.
It’s
 not necessary to follow popular
trends
. There are two main reasons – waste of
money
 and
lose
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 of individuality.
Firstly
, the latest tending
clothes
 are sold at much higher prices than others.
It’s
 a waste of
money
 because there are always new products coming out
in
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every season.
Furthermore
, the price of famous brands like Louis Vuitton, Chanel and Burberry are triple
up
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.
People
 who
are
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desire to follow
fashion
trends
 and to buy famous brands must make a great deal of
money
 every three months.
Secondly
,
it’s
 vital that
human’s
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clothes
 should present their own personality and uniqueness
instead
 of following
fashion
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a fashion
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 guide.
people
 who follow
fashion
trends
 usually wear similar or
same
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the same
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clothes
 even
they
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if they
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 don’t look good on them.
However
,
people
 should be confident
to
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in
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 their taste and feel comfortable to
be wear
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wear
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 them out. In conclusion, more and more
people
 believe that
fashion
 is an important and necessary part
in
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of
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 our daily life.
However
, it shouldn’t be the factor that
influence
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 our clothing due to the expense of buying the newest products and the
lost
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loss
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 of individuality.
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