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In many workplaces, online communication is now more common than face-to-face meeting. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, with
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 technology, remote communication through online platforms dramatically is increasing more
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 over the world. There are
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numerous
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 trend outweigh the cons. It can be seen that online
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 can save more time and cost for travelling compared to
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meeting
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 no doubt, audiences can join a meeting from anywhere, as the result, commuting through heavy traffic is not required anymore.
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, online meetings can reduce travel
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 and parking
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. Another point,
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 remote tools play an important role
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adventages
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advantages
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 for global business in
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 of recruiting potential employees without disturbing
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 for remote workers.
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, there are some drawbacks which should be considered.
Online
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meeting
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 can be distracted easily and often interrupted by some network problems. It is probably not effective as real face-to-face communication. To sum up, I think
online
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 meeting has more benefits
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drawbacks
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. It helps both employees and business owners to save travel time and cost.
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, it
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 new
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opportunities
 for candidates around the world who desire to work for international companies
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 their dream jobs without immigration.
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