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Some people believe that modern technology has reduced human power to think. Do you agree or disagree?

having been reported as a novelty of the dawn of human history,
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 imposes irreversible
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 on
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human beings.
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 of thinking, being distractive and forgetful are just parts of
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the destructive
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effects
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 of life- indispensable exploration. needless to say, advance in
automation
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 leads to
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, easy
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 and simplicity to learn new pieces of knowledge. apart from the overwhelming advantage of
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, some unpleasant results made suspects about how
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 use of it is plausible. todays, whatever population need is available thanks to progress in
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. take
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, we had to take a trip in order to lose of innovative mind of humankind. as mentioned before the availability of everything is a remarkable matter by which thanking of society has impressed. it is naive to assume
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 flawlessly, provided that
automation
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 manipulating doesn't adopt probably, destructive
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 will be created soon to the extent that various
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aspects of human lives will be impressed. overusing
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 is a crystal example of abuse in
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 an important innovation. according to scholarly references, the use of
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the mobile
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phone
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 for above 8 hours per day contributes to unbelievable harmful
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 on children. from less of their eyes to the low power of thinking.
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 we should take in notice that all age groups are threatened by the
aformentioned
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aforementioned
 technology now. so, a challenging question is here; what extent
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nation
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 use
automation
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? we seek the answer in important and irrelevant applications of
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. it's common knowledge that addiction to the mobile phones as
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interesting
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 should be limited to sum up, I believe that
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 would be bound to fail by overuse of
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, protective actions
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oflot
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lot
 time in call up and eliminating irrelevant tasks are better to take
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 consideration.

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