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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A group of society are poor in every nation and every country has a plan
that
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how to help
these kind
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 of
people
. The dishonesty of the governments and less awareness of
people
 about the latest ways of earning are the main reasons behind
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this
 worldwide poverty. I would like to discuss both problems and solutions in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the upper-level
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management
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managements
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 of the countries don't provide loyal facilities to their public. They take loans from IMF (International Monetary Fund) to invest in the country's development but they invest that
money
 in their personal businesses.
For instance
, a financial ministry of any state claims that they need funds for education development. After approving and releasing
money
 from the IMF, they will not invest in the education field, even if they would like to spend on other kinds of projects
such
 as road
constructions
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, hospital
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 and so on. Why they are interested to spend
money
 on these projects? because they get tenders and gain loads of profit for their own companies. Eventually, the governments must be loyal
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 their public and public funds.
In addition
,
this
 is a digital era and
people
 must be aware of the lasted technologies which will help them to earn easily. The
people
 are unable to work online and due to some ,reasons jobs are unavailable. As the result, they suffer poverty. Nowadays,
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online jobs are more popular as compared to physical jobs.
Thus
, they should get advanced education and sell their services online. It will help them to solve their financial problems. In conclusion, as I already have discussed that dishonesty
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 the financial department of any country and a shortage of advanced skills awareness are the key causes of poverty. The solutions are for governments to spend
money
 on the public and
people
 must learn online skills to end their poor life.
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