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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

#cities #towns #world #volume #traffic #actions
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Traffic
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 congestion has been a major problem in many urban communities of the world. As
high
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number
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 of
traffic
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 tie-up is increasing on daily basis thereby causing
problem
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 which many
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over
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overpopulation
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population
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 and bad
roads
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inability
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the inability
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 to read
traffic
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 signs to be the reasons for
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.
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,
reduction
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 in
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number
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of
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populace and construction of good
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 with education on
usage
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 of
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 signs could help curb
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 challenge. The following paragraphs will expatiate more on my views.
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road block
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roadblock
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 in many cities and towns is
as a result
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large
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population
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. Individuals from near and far chose a particular city as their place of abode thereby increasing its
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 count.
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 of
this
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, there is road blockage during rush hours in those cities.
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, the former capital territory of Nigeria, Lagos state is vastly populated due to its lucrative and affluence value,
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 leading to
jam
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 during a specific time frame
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 as in the morning and evening.
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, bad
roads
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has
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 caused more harm than good.
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 has led to
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 of so many citizens.
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nonchalant
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the nonchalant
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 attitude of
masses
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the masses
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 in the usage of
traffic
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 signs increases
grid lock
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gridlock
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 in many
society
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.
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, road blockage can be eradicated by
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 of good
roads
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 and
educating
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the
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apply
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illiterate drivers
how
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on how
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 to interpret the
traffic
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 lights. As
this
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 helps to reduce
delay
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 in
traffic
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 and death witnessed
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 of it.
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,
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traffic
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 signaler or flag person should be placed in each
traffic
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 post , in order for them to assist in the movement and coordination of vehicles.
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, people in authority shout perform census in order to reduce the
number
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 of immigrants in a city as
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 helps to reduce
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overpopulation
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over
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population
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. In conclusion,
although
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increased
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number
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 of populaces and damaged reads has been sited to be the cause of
traffic
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 lock in many cities, construction of good
roads
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 and reducing
population
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 count will go a long way in assisting with the problem. 331 words
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