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The plans below shows a theatre in 2010 and 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant

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The maps depict the comparison of cinema
center
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 in two different periods 2010 and 2012. Overall, it is clear that many changes took place in
theatre
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a theatre
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 in
given
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the given
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 time period. In 2012 cinema was more spacious and facilitated as compared to 2010. Some places were reconstructed while others were constant and new. To commence with, space of dressing room decreased which is along with showers in North - West direction . Cafe converted into
ticket
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the ticket
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 office.
Moreover
,
coordination
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the coordination
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 room took place of
dressing
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the dressing
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 room and storage
replaced
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 by
admin
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the admin
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 office in
North - East
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 direction .
Auditorium
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The auditorium
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 was located in the middle.
Furthermore
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 ticket office made a way for storage in the left bottom corner.
Restaurant
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 was
new
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 constructed.
Main
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 door and stage
was
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were
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 constant in
given
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the given
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 time period.
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