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Some people believe that universities should only accept students with high marks. Others think that students of all ages and abilities levels should be able to attend universities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #universities #students #marks #ages #abilities #levels
All the most interesting things in the world lie outside of your comfort zone.’- Benedict Cumberbatch Sitting in a comfortable chair, with a magically smelling cup of coffee
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 to me, I see your conference as the best way to step out of my comfort zone. MUN will provide me with an excellent opportunity to practice public speaking, broaden my horizon and communicate with people from diverse backgrounds.
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, imitating the UN ambassadors, writing resolution papers and debating will give me relevant experience, taking into account my wish to realize
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 of becoming an ambassador. Looking at
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 a more global scale, it will benefit Uzbekistan, since an experienced worker (
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 I will become by participating
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 the conference) is always better than
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