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The graph illustrates the rise and fall of three different types of criminal activities in New Port city
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 between 2003 and 2012. Overall, it is clear that whereas the number of
burglary
cases
 fell, the quantities of
car
theft
 and
robbery
cases
 remained rather constant throughout the time. In terms of
burglary
incidents
, it started at slightly below 3500 in 2003. After a surge to approximately 3800, it collapsed to about 1200
incidents
 in 2008. Except for a marginal increase to around 1500
cases
 in 2009, the number of
burglary
incidents
 levelled off for the rest of the period. With regards to
car
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theft
 and
robbery
incidents
, the former began at 2800
incidents
 while the latter was at approximately 500. In the
next
 2 years, whereas
car
theft
cases
 stayed rather the same,
robbery
incidents
 climbed marginally to about 1000. From 2005 to 2012, the number
robbery
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incidents
 fell and rebounded to 600, and it stayed at around 600 for the remaining time, despite fluctuations. As for
car
theft
incidents
, it fell to 2000
incidents
first
,
then
 rose and overtook
burglary
incidents
. By 2012,
car
theft
cases
 were at 2800, the highest among the three categories.
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