People think the professional sportsmen or sportswomen behaviours on or off the field are not important as long as they are good players. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it.

In every aspect of
humanlife
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human life
,
behaviour
plays a vital role. A school of thought believe that paid
players
such
as both male and
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female
conduct
is
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not
such
a major factor whether they are
in
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on
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the
ground
or out of the
ground
.It is only considering the
efficiancy
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efficiency
of their play. In
this
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I am explaining my point of view with certain examples. In the personal and professional circumstances,
individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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behaviour
affect
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affects
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both positively and negatively .
By regarding
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the case of non-ameture
players
, if they
are not behave
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are not behaving
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in a good manner it will
treated
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treat
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as negative.
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That means
, professionals may be good at the
play
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playground
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ground
but the
behaviour
is in a bad way , it will
carries
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carry
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the worse thought in the mind of
team
members and
audience
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the audience
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.And
also
, it reduces the
team
spirit.
For example
,
the
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group captain
behave
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behaves
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rudely and
disrespectful
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the disrespectful
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way it may
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lead
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lea
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lead
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to
decrease
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a decrease
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in
confidence
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the confidence
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of group members and get a false outcome or result in play. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, the sportsmen and women are motivation
factor
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factors
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for the upcoming generation and among youth. So I opined that, if the
players
are treating good mannerisms and
keeping
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keep
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better individuality it may create
positives
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positive
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among the
team
players
and the audience.
For instance
, Sachin Tendulkar was one of the most
vibtant
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vibrant
player and
team
captain of
Indian
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the Indian
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cricket
team
and his confidence and friendly
behaviour
increase
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increased
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the
team
spirit and get better results
inthe
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in the
matches.
Moreover
, his charity supports in personal life
also
an encouragement to the youngsters. To
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conclude
,
behaviour
is the outcome of individuality and both the professional
players
should keep a better personality at the
ground
and out the
ground
.
otherwise
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it will
brings
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negative
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a negative
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image and the youth will
definetly
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definitely
immitate
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imitate
them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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