Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Bad situations
such
as
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unsatisfactory
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an unsatisfactory
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job
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or shortage of money can lead you to two scenarios.
People
who can eat it and live the same
life
or
people
who
destined
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to make
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a change
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change
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to improve the
situation
they were in.
This
cause argument
between
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people
that
either
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they should stay in the bad
situation
or improve it. I will discuss both
view
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either
people
who accept a bad
situation
and
people
who try to improve the
situation
. Facing these situations and choosing to tolerate and be with
it
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can work
on
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a large number of
bad
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a bad
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situation
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situations
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.
For example
, unsatisfactory
job
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jobs
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and
shortage
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a shortage
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of money. Choosing to accept the
situation
can be superb because it is very hard to find another
job
, let alone
finding
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a
job
that can satisfy you and give you the money that you need. It will be very stressful to do so.
This
way of dealing with the
situation
can
severed
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all
this problem
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these problems
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.
This
will
also
help with the trust you will get from your boss and coworker because of your loyalty and ability to eat it and do your work.
On the other hand
, other
people
who choose to improve in these situations
you
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will find yourself to be in
more
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the more
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stressful
situation
of finding another
job
. If you manage to find the right
job
for you that
suit
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your need, you will enjoy the present more and have long term
life
enjoyment. For
instant
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, you hate your
job
and you think that you rather have a stressful time finding a new
job
rather than
stuck
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in
this
hell hole and if you
dont
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don't
you will regret it for
life
.
This
can lead to improvement in the
situation
. In conclusion, I believe that trying to improve the
situation
can be more effective in the long run, but you need to
becareful
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be careful
not to rush
finding
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another
job
. Manage your stress and
dont
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don't
get
overwhelm
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, for it will make you
more happy
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in
life
.
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