Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

For
long
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time, advertising is used as a tool for businesses to sell their products. Today the method of advertising is quite different from the past.
However
, some
people
argue that the benefit is still significantly successful to attract buyers.
On the other hand
, others argue that advertising is not very special
thus
people
tend to ignore it. In my opinion, advertising is still an essential tool to attract buyers through the
right
media
. To start with
currently
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advertising has been switched from
the
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offline
media
to
the
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online
media
. Some
people
say that advertising is still useful to draw buyers’ attention.
People
today are very involved with social
media
. It is part of their daily life from waking up to getting
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,
people
spend hours to look social
media
. The popular social
media
that
frequently
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opened is Instagram. One of the
strength
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is Instagram has
logics
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in the system to analyze
what
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user’s current
interest
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interests
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thus
the
right
ads
will be provided and
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the user
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user
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users
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will high potentially buy the product.
For example
, when a woman is frequently searching or liking
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post
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about makeup, Instagram will show many
ads
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related
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to makeup, and she
more
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likely to open the product’s account.
On the other hand
, others are convinced that advertising doesn’t impact
at
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the selling number. It is considered that
people
will highly ignore the
ads
which appeared on
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website
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that
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located
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at the bottom or top page. While that
kind
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of
ads
are
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irrelevant to
people
’s current
interest
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interests
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or needs. A good illustration of
this
is when
people
open
news
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website and see
ads
in
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some part of the page, they tend to immediately
to
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close the
ads
or even report the
ads
to be closed permanently because it blocks the view. In conclusion, advertising with the
right
media
will be a very beneficial tool that potentially
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the selling number. The
ads
in the
right
media
will attract more buyers rather than using the wrong
media
that be able
to
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waste the budget because
people
will ignore it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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