Consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays, people pay more and more attention to the products they consume. Customers are reaping the benefits of these
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products, but they should
also
beware of the drawbacks that come along with the consumption of these
goods
.
This
essay shall discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of
this
growing trend. On the one hand, there is no doubt that consumerism is not only boosting the economy, it is
also
improving the overall standard of living.
This
is due to the increased demand for
consumer
goods
that has created more and more jobs.
Besides
that home appliances
such
as washing machines help eliminate a daily household
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people more time for relaxation and leisure.
For instance
, in VietNam, Samsung has invested a total
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17,7 billion USD with 6 factories and 110,000 employees.
On the other hand
, materialism has created bad habits which have negatively impacted people’s lives. Family members now often have less communication face to face than they did before.
This
is due to
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electronic devices
such
as smartphones, laptops and iPads.
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parents and their children could be sitting together in a room, but they are totally separate from each other
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because they all are busy with their online communication.
In addition
, they are heavily relying on
consumer
entertainment
goods
.
This
may lead people to become less active which can have negative consequences
such
as obesity, diabetes and overall poor general health. In conclusion, the increased demand for
consumer
goods
is actually a
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sword. There are some benefits
such
as a higher standard of living and a better overall economy.
However
, there are
also
some drawbacks
such
as a lesser family connection and negative health aspects. Overall, it was clear to me that the consumption of
consumer
goods
does outweigh the harmful effects.
Submitted by viet.phamtan on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • improved living standards
  • ease of communication
  • variety of choices
  • increased productivity
  • waste generation
  • environmental impact
  • materialistic mindset
  • financial burden
  • inequality
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