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In many cities,many people are living in large apartment blocks.Does this accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages.

#cities #people #apartment #blocks #accommodation
ACCOMMODATION PREFERENCES CAUSE ALWAYS
CONFLICTIONS
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 BETWEEN
PEOPLE
. NOWADAYS, IT CAN BE SAID THAT MANY
PEOPLE
 PREFER TO LIVE IN HUGE APARTMENTS
INSTEAD
 OF PRIVATE PROPERTIES.
ALTHOUGH
THIS
 CHOICE HAS SOME DRAWBACKS, I BELIEVE THAT THE ADVANTAGES OF BEING A RESIDENT IN
THIS
 TYPE OF ACCOMMODATION OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES AND
THIS
 ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN WHY I SUPPORT LIVING IN APARTMENTS.
FIRST
 AND FOREMOST,
TIME
 SAVER ACTIVITIES AND CHOICES ARE THE MOST IMPORTANT THINGS IN OUR HECTIC LIVES, AND THANKS TO JANITORS, LIVING IN AN ORGANIZED, LARGE APARTMENT PROVIDES
PEOPLE
TIME
. TO AN EXTENT, MAINTAINING PROPER CONDITIONS FOR A HOUSE NEEDS
TIME
 AND EFFORT. BECAUSE OF THE JANITOR,
PEOPLE
 LIVING IN A HUGE BUILDING CAN SPARE THEIR
TIME
 FOR ACTIVITIES WHAT THEY WANT,
INSTEAD
 OF REPAIRING PLUMMER SYSTEM.
IN ADDITION
, BEING SURROUNDED BY NEIGHBOURS CAN MAKE
PEOPLE
 FEEL IN SAFE. TO EXPAND, WHEN THERE IS AN EMERGENCY SITUATION
SUCH
 AS A HEALTH EMERGENCY OR A PERSON FEELS THRILLED ABOUT A NOISE THAT THEY DO NOT KNOW WHERE COME FROM,
PEOPLE
 NEED SOMEONE ELSE INSTINCTIVELY AS HUMAN NATURE AND IN A BUILDING THERE ARE ALWAYS SOME
PEOPLE
 TO KNOCK THEIR DOORS AND ASK THEM FOR THEIR HELP. TO SUM UP,
ALTHOUGH
 THERE ARE SOME SIDE EFFECTS OF LIVING IN A HUGE BUILDING, THE BENEFITS OF IT OVERWEIGH THE DRAWBACKS. SPENDING ON
TIME
 FOR PERSONAL HOBBIES
INSTEAD
 OF MANDATORY REPAIR TASKS OR KNOWING THAT THERE ARE ALWAYS
PEOPLE
 TO ASK FOR THEIR HELP REGARDLESS OF
TIME
 ARE UNDENIABLE AND INEVITABLE FACTS ABOUT LIVING IN AN ORGANIZED BUILDING.
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