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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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A trip abroad always brings a lot of new impressions, but it is worth noting the very great harm of tourists to a foreign
country
. Visitors render ecological and cultural harm to the
country
.
Firstly
, from the point of view of environmental damage, the increased number of visitors depletes fuel, water, food and forest reserves in tourist destinations.
For example
, countries that are famous for their golf clubs could provide their people with water
instead
 of irrigating the land for the game.
Secondly
, the high influx of sightseers
also
 increases the risk of disharmony
of
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 cultural values. Residents, most often, can relate negatively to arrivals.
In addition
 to
this
, tourists may not respect the local culture, which may lead to conflict situations.
For example
, if there is a quarrel,
then
 most often a citizen of that
country
 is right and the rights of visitors in
this
 regard may be infringed. Each person decides for himself whether to travel to a particular
country
, but it is worth remembering that along with the fact that you increase the economy of the
country
, you
also
 bring harm.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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