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We have been living in the nuclear age now for over half a century. Since the first atomic bombs were developed, nuclear technology has provided governments with the ability to totally destroy the planet. Yet the technology has been put to positive use as an energy source and in certain areas of medicine. To what extent is nuclear technology a a danger to life on Earth? What are the benefits and risks assoicated with its use?

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Human has been keeping on continuous searching and developing numerous ways to establish
safety
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 and security of each nation by producing different nuclear weapons and
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 it for their future survival.
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, nuclear technology has a huge
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 effect on living things on Earth. And I will discuss its beneficial factor and possible negative effects with its usage in the ensuing paragraphs. On the one hand,
nuclear
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the nuclear
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 weapon will totally destruct the Earth whenever conflicts
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 between nations.
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 between Russia and Ukraine, other countries are affirmative of their safety and security since they owned an excellent weapon that could protect their
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border
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boarder
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border
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 and invasion would be prevented.
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, either of
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this
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 two countries will suffer once they pull the trigger to release the atomic bomb against the other party. Not only
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humankind will vanish as well
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the entire place.
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, nuclear technology is crucial to
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the healthcare
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 system
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it
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could help diagnose and heal any form of critical
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disease
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such
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 as cancer.
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 it plays a vital role in
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medicine, it would destroy the normal cells in the body since it is the most potent form of radiation.
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, people might have
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 positive outcome but not all will survive;
especialy
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especially
 those elders that could not stand the process of diagnostic procedures,
eventualy
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eventually
 the rate of mortality will
increased
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. As well as the side effects of radiation
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 the health care workers who are regularly exposed
on
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 the equipment, in the long
run
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 human life will
be place
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on
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in
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distinction
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the distinction
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. In summary, nuclear technology is imperative for the safety and security of different nations as well as it helps mankind to heal diseases
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, the side effects are extremely dangerous to both living things and planet Earth.
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