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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns ad cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #ad #cities
Nowadays, online shopping
are
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 in-demand and trending in all parts of the world. There is a significant increase
of
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 online shoppers
by
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using social media platforms,
that
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 could greatly affect
for
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the business owners in the city
center
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. I do not concur with the said, all the precedents and justifications shall be elicited
on
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 the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
 with, physical shopping is crucial for
the
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human beings in order to touch, see and fit the certain products they want to buy. An example
ot
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of
this
, in buying the basic commodities of the people like fruits and
vegatables
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vegetables
, it is better recommended to shop in
different
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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 in that they can ask bargain at the same time. In congruence,
peopel
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people
 meet
the
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basi
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basic
 needs, and
to
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experience in claiming the products.
Another things
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 that I need to consider of, buying online can cause fraud in which the personal
identify
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identity
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can trace by the programmer. They need to secure their personal information even
picture
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pictures
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 can be deleted after any transactions. On the account of the study, many
olders
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older
holders
elders
 do not have enough knowledge about technology with around 40%
,.
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As a result
, be careful and vigilant in doing
an online transactions
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online transactions
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. By and large, shopping
mall
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malls
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 could not replace by other means. It is still pivotal of having a city
center
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 in a particular area.
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