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It is difficult for people in the cities to get enough physical exercise. What are the causes and solutions?

#people #cities #exercise
Doing yoga and exercise is the key to
the
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 healthy life. Nowadays, it has been impossible for the population living in
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rural areas to do any kind of physical
exercises
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.The following essay will throw light on what can be the reasons behind
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 suggest some remedies to overcome
this
 problem. To commence with,
people
 in the big cities have a very hectic schedule.They usually
work
 from morning to afternoon and it is obvious that after their office hours they get exhausted which makes them
deperive
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deprive
 from going to gyms or jogging or even for walking.
For example
, there are certain software big companies in
city
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cities
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 like Bombay,India where the software developers have to
work
 day or night
fot
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for
 their firms.There are times when are
are
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on call which means they can be called anytime by their employer to
work
.
Moreover
, when folks are paid double
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 their regular wage for the overtime they do
then
 they only aim to
work
 as much as they can and
thus
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 up having no time available for any
excercise
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exercise
. Having said
this
,
population
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the population
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 should try to
se
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use
set
 their priorities.They should set a schedule in
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such
 way that they manage to have
atleast
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at least
 30 minutes for the physical activities.
Work places
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Workplaces
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 should
also
 give an hour break to their employees out of which half an hour must be for their gym if they wish to.
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Government
Goverment
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The goverment
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 should set up some
oragnisations
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organisations
 to make
people
 aware of the benefits of
excercises
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exercises
exercise
 and they should hire some trainers that can go from community to community to create
interests
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 in the
people
 and can indulge them in
such
 activities. Despite
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having a busy life
people
 should understand that if they are not healthy wealth is not going to be of any use.
Therefore
, they should try to engage themselves in physical activities to ensure they are healthy and active.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyles
  • desk-bound jobs
  • fast-paced urban life
  • conveniences
  • physical exertion
  • barrier
  • densely populated
  • pollution
  • safety concerns
  • urban planning
  • pedestrian areas
  • cycle lanes
  • accessible
  • workplace wellness programs
  • subsidize
  • financial barriers
  • public awareness
  • incorporate
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