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businesses
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apply
these small
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this small business
these small businesses
business
will impact negatively and might destroy the local communities.
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business
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businesses
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this small business
these small businesses
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the large
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threaten
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an increase
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businesses
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large
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in large
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these local
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this local business
these local businesses
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the standard of the Use synonyms
life
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people
can not afford it.
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