Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities.

Nowadays a
lot
of large
business
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businesses
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such
as
supermarkets
have been improved fastly and have become widespread in the world,
therefore
a
lot
of small
business
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businesses
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have affected and lost the ability to rival.
Large
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number of
people
believe that closing
like
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apply
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these small
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this small business
these small businesses
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business
will impact negatively and might destroy the local communities.
Firstly
, small
business
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businesses
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play an important function in keeping the economy of local communities safe. In fact,local communities are vital because a
lot
of factories rely on
to
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them to
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sell their products
thus
without
these small
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this small business
these small businesses
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business
,
large
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a large
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number of factories will
be threaten
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to close
as a result
a
lot
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workers might lose their jobs and lead to
increase
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the idleness.
For example
,in some Mediterranean
countries
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they
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are completely
depend
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on a small
business
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businesses
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.
In addition
,there is a study says that roughly 80%
percent
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of a
people
tend to buy their
requirement
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such
as foods and vegetables from small
supermarkets
because they found them cheaper than
large
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in large
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supermarkets
therefore
without
these local
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this local business
these local businesses
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business
the standard of the
life
would be very expensive and a
people
can not afford it.
Secondly
,
absence
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the absence
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of local businesses will make
the
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life
very complicated for the
people
who
life
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in
a
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countryside areas.
Moreover
, in many Mediterranean countries,most
people
live in cities
consequently
large
supermarkets
not
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exist in
a
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the
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countryside
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, as a result,
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as a result
the
people
who live there buy their
need
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needs
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from the
the
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small
supermarkets
consequently
we can not imagine our
life
without
these small supermarket
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this small supermarket
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. In conclusion,despite large
supermarkets
are important in our
life
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since there are comprehensive and supply us with our
need
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,
however
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,however
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small
supermarkets
are
also
important and we have
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support
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them.
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