Hollywood film stars, famous entertainment artists and professional athletes can earn in the billions. Are these high salaries warranted (deserved)?

Super stars
Correct your spelling
Superstars
show examples
, famous and high profile athletes are normally the wealthy in the industry, and they sure deserve high salaries for their effort and
well developed
Add a hyphen
well-developed
show examples
job, mostly because
this
benefits them but
also
those businesses, the workers there and many other persons outside, around the world.
First
, the industry is a large and strong money maker union of companies and film stars, football players, singers or any famous person who works hard to provide the main content for them.
Into
Change preposition
In
show examples
entertainment
production
Add a comma
,production
show examples
we can find music,
theater
Change the spelling
theatre
show examples
, movies, tv shows, sports and any type of art or physical expression related, and many of those who participate
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
here had to have a strong discipline,
self esteem
Add a hyphen
self-esteem
show examples
, a clear and efficient daily routine and values to
insure
Correct your spelling
ensure
show examples
a great result or a wonderful performance.
Likewise
, these companies generate not only work for their celebrities, they normally have many people working as a team in the background, to
fulfill
Change the spelling
fulfil
show examples
any need during the event.
Second
and related to the
last
reason.
As a result
, for any type of entertainment, big companies are able to sell mercancy related to it. A lot of businesses create direct and long partnerships with the industry, and as a
consequence
Add a comma
,consequence
show examples
they manufacture a variety of products about the main
proffits
Correct your spelling
profits
profit
generators, which brings money
for
Change preposition
from
show examples
all directions, just by using the image of an actor, player, singer or other famous people. To conclude, those famous people may be billionaires and most of them give us something by
effort
Add an article
the effort
an effort
show examples
that is
not tangible but everyone needs occasionally,
that is
fun, passion, joy and amusement. They
also
help many human beings and causes with a big part of the capital they own, creating
fundations
Correct your spelling
foundations
for something meaningful for them.
Last
but not least, their image and discipline generate products and gainings, even three times more than what those celebrities constantly win, and millions of individuals are going to consume them.
Submitted by info on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: