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In the present era, children are found to have fewer responsibilities than it used to be in the past time. Some people consider it as positive development, however, some other people believe it to be a negative trend. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

#era #children #responsibilities #time #people #development #trend
Dear Tolu, How are you and everyone? I hope
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 letter meets you well I’m writing
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 say a big thank you for the Holiday. Honestly, it was the most amazing I’ve felt in
such
 a long time. From the day I arrived in Lagos, you were nothing but kind all through the Holiday Reaching Home, I was unpacking and realized I left my
wallet
 in the bathroom after removing it from my
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 to take a bath, I remember you warned me a couple of times to be careful with it. As you know my office ID card is in
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wallet
 and I won’t be given access to the building without it. I have contacted a driver there in Lagos, his name is Lanre and he has agreed to come to your house to pick up the
wallet
 on Tuesday, 8pm when I’m sure you’d be back home from the office but I understand sometimes you might still be out so kindly instruct your security man to handover the
wallet
 to him if you’re not back yet. Sorry for any inconvenience
this
 might have caused you. Take care
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