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Most modern families have both parents working and as a result children spend less and less time with their parents. What is the reason for this? What solutions can you suggest?

#families #parents #children #time #reason
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The quality and quantity of
time
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 that
parents
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 used to spend with their
children
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has
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 considerably reduced as families have become more modern and both
parents
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 have started to
work
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons for
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 growing problem and explore possible solutions.
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, I will discuss the financial reasons for
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 growing problem.
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, I will consider how globalisation may
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 be a reason for
parents
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 spending less
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 with their
children
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.
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 with, it’s clear that the cost of childcare is extremely expensive for almost all
parents
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 who need someone to look after their
children
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. People who live in large cities have more options for nurseries than elsewhere, but the prices are still not affordable. A possible solution to
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 problem could be to have government subsidised and discounted childcare available to all
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, possibly under a certain yearly salary. By doing
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,
parents
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 will be able to
work
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 only one job with normal hours,
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 spending more
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 with their
children
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. Another reason
parents
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 and
children
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 are spending less
time
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 together could be due to the low cost and easily available transport now open. Many adults are travelling more, often for
work
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 commitments. For
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reason
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 they are unable to spend a lot of
time
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 with their
children
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, or simply prefer to holiday. Especially for
work
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, employers should consider
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 when asking
parents
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 to travel for their jobs. It would enable families to spend more quality
time
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 together. With both
parents
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 in the family having
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full-time
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time
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 jobs, their
time
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 with their
children
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 is compromised leading to
adverse
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 impact on the
children
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. It is important that the
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 find a balance between earning money and spending quality
time
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 with their
children
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 for their overall development.
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