many young people today's spend too much time falling the latest fashion trends in areas such as clothing and technology to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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There is no doubt that youngsters ,these days, tend to spend most of
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their precious
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in order to be updated, be its attires or gadgets. Even though
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chasing new styles has become a prominent need of modern society, I disagree to make it a priority as several other activities in young
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and attention. It goes without saying that
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century has ignited
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's interest to look beautiful and become an impressive personality.
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appearance and wealth have become a status
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and who do not show
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are usually considered inferior.
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to it, social media has affected the minds of young ones profoundly. watching
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favourite celebrities wearing stylish clothes and enjoying upgraded versions of mobile phones
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laptops, they are unable to regulate
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inclinations towards it and ultimately, try to lead
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similar lifestyle without analysing that celebs have proved their mettle in certain fields,
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,they still have miles to go.
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is the leading reason that they end up wasting their highly important
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on counterproductive things and
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other pivotal decisions.
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, at
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, they must divert their potential to gain something higher than clothes and electronic gadgets. Needless to say, young age is a building block consisting abundance of energy dedication intelligence and several other traits. If put in
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right direction, the posses power to make youngsters ideal icons of
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generation. Take Mr APJ Abdul Kalam,
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, a scientist, teacher,politician,writer and an influencer, who recognised his distinct capabilities earlier in
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and by leading
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ordinary
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and simple
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he thought extraordinary and achieved
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worldwide recognition and secured his place in one of the most intelligent
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in the world. To conclude, young
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can consider the dressing and other essentialities to be worth seeing,
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, they must not waste their overall worth and non-reversible
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in maintaining these counterproductive needs, as other big things
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as ambitions and long term plans require more free
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and deep considerations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fashion-forward
  • Trendsetting
  • Peer pressure
  • Consumerism
  • Brand-conscious
  • Social media influencers
  • Sustainable fashion
  • Eco-consciousness
  • Disposable income
  • Fast fashion
  • Technophile
  • Digital divide
  • Planned obsolescence
  • Status symbol
  • Cutting-edge
  • Materialistic
  • Ethical consumerism
  • Personal identity
  • Body image
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